I'm beginning to get comments back from my first line of defense: the friends and colleagues who read my first draft. They're an invaluable help, catch all the things I haven't, and might not, before I send the ms. off to my editor.
So far I've heard the following:
Shouldn't the killer show a little temper early on?
What month is it anyway, would the lilacs really be blooming?
Is Theda a bit "breath obsessed," first Musetta's, then Bill's?
If he proposes, shouldn't she at least respond?
And, yes, dear friends, it seems I am incapable of correctly spelling "weird"!
Naomi, Lisa, Jon, Chris, Vicki, Brett, Karen – thank you all!